Do u mind correcting my English! it's a short msg. about ';cases & bags foctory';...with many thanks!

Cases %26amp; Bags Factory devotes to design and manufacture various kinds of the hand bags. The factory has professional technical and management staff as well as excellent marketing personnel. It tightens professional knowledge to the market and develops favorable products which make us outstanding in the market. The producing department applies scientific management and accords to the state standard. Each procedure is precisely cooperated. All the products must be tested strictly. So our high quality products enjoy high confidence from customers.


Based on the principle of quality first, we have set up fine cooperation relationship with U.S.A., Hong Kong and Taiwan as well as domestic customers. Our products feature excellent material, elegant design, precise manufacturing and low price that benefit our customers.


Currently, we are expecting to set up partnership with you (Department Store retailed agents, wholesalers and gift ordering suppliers) to achieve mutual benefits.Do u mind correcting my English! it's a short msg. about ';cases %26amp; bags foctory';...with many thanks!
Cases %26amp; Bags Factory devotes to THE design and manufacture OF various kinds of _X_ hand bags. The factory has professional technical and management staff as well as excellent marketing personnel. It tightens professional knowledge OF the market and develops favorable products which make us stand OUT in the market. The MANUFACTURING department applies scientific management and accords to the state standard. Each procedure is precisely cooperated (COORDIANTED?). All the products ARE STRICTLY tested. So our high quality products enjoy GREAT confidence from customers.


Based on the principle of quality first, we have set up A fine cooperation relationship with U.S.A., Hong Kong and Taiwan as well as domestic customers. Our products feature excellent materialS, elegant design, precise manufacturing and A low price that benefit our customers.


Currently, we are expecting to set up partnership with you (Department Store retail agents, wholesalers and gift ordering suppliers) to achieve mutual benefits.








PS. The part of the accords and state standards is kind of fuzzy, I'm not sure what you meant. . . Hope it helps.Do u mind correcting my English! it's a short msg. about ';cases %26amp; bags foctory';...with many thanks!
Cases %26amp; Bags Factory is devoted to the design and manufacture of various kinds of handbags. The factory has a professional technical and management staff, as well as excellent marketing personnel. They research the handbag market and develop favorable products which make us outstanding in the market. The production department applies scientific management and meets state standards. Each procedure is precisely coordinated. All the products are strictly tested, so that our high quality products enjoy high confidence from customers.





Based on the principle of quality first, we have set up a fine cooperative relationship with U.S.A., Hong Kong and Taiwan as well as domestic customers. Our products feature excellent material, elegant design, precise manufacturing and low prices - all of which benefit our customers.





We are currently seeking partnerships with you - department store retail agents, wholesalers and gift ordering suppliers - in order to achieve mutual benefits.
Overall it's okay but I see a problem in the first sentence:


';Cases %26amp; Bags Factory devotes to design and manufacture various kinds of the hand bags. ';


I would replace the words ';devotes to'; with something else; maybe ';designs and manufactures'; without saying ';devotes to;'; it really doesn't make sense.
Cases %26amp; Bags Factory designs and manufactures a variety of handbags. The company has professional and experienced personnel in the technical, management and marketing departments. We study the consumer market closely in order to help us develop products that will be more likely to enjoy a favorable reception when launched. The production department employs scientific methods that abide by state standards. Each process meets the highest quality standards, and all products are tested and inspected closely for strict quality control. As such, our customers can always be confident that any product from our company will be of the best craftmanship and highest quality.





To uphold the principle of ';quality first';, we have established cooperative relationships with companies in the U.S.A., Hong Kong, and Taiwan, as well as local businesses. Our products are manufactured only from the best material, follow elegant designs, are manufactured skillfully, and are reasonably priced -- all with the benefit of our customers in mind. We would like to offer you (department store retail agents, wholesalers, catalog suppliers) these products for your consideration, and believe that you too, will find that they would be a excellent addition to your inventory. We are certain that adding us to your potential list of vendors could only be of mutual benefit.